Hire Odessa Hart, Songwriter & Lyricist
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Step 1: Describe your job
- Lyric polish for your songYou get: Your lyrics polished, with changes marked · ⏱ 2 hrs$30
- Total, fixed$30
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Total $30
- • Lyric polish for your song: $30
- Full lyrics and one demo track
- 2 revisions included
- Size limit: one song, up to about 3 minutes of lyrics
- Counts as a separate task: studio recording, vocals by a real singer or distribution
Example deliverable: Lyric polish for a folk song about a father's workshop
Example of work, not a client review scenario: Singer-songwriter preparing a song for an open mic and a home recording · what a finished job from Odessa looks like · turnaround 2 hrs
Package: Lyric polish for your song · $30 · 2 hrs
Here's the chorus I'd keep:
"Sawdust in the porch light,
Pencil behind your ear,
You measured twice for everything,
And you're still measuring here."
It came from your second verse, where you mention the pencil he always kept behind his ear. That's the detail that's only his. It belonged in the chorus.
WHAT YOUR CHORUS SAID BEFORE
"I miss you every day,
Wish you didn't go away,
Your love will always stay."
Every word is true. But "day," "away" and "stay" are the rhymes in a thousand other songs, and the chorus didn't say anything about him. Your verses did.
WHAT I CHANGED
- Chorus: rebuilt from the pencil and the porch light, both from your own verses.
- Verse 1, line 3: "the smell of the wood" became "the smell of cedar shavings." He built in cedar, you told me.
- Verse 2: cut one line so it matches verse 1 in length. You can hear the difference when you sing it.
- Bridge: untouched. It's the best part of the song.
RHYMES I AVOIDED
day / away / stay, heart / apart, cry / goodbye, above / love. These pull the listener out of your dad's shop and into every other song about loss.
SINGING CHECK
I sang the new chorus over your recording at 78 bpm. The line "and you're still measuring here" lands on the downbeat, so it lands softly. If it feels crowded, drop the "and."
A GENTLE QUESTION
"Measuring here" suggests he's still present. If you meant something more final, I can write a version where he's gone. I kept yours because it felt like what you meant.
— Odessa