THE BRIEF
A volunteer translated our new-patient welcome packet into Vietnamese. A patient told us some of it sounds strange. Can you review it and fix what's wrong?
Scenario: Office manager at a family dental clinic with many Vietnamese-speaking patients
Package: Review and fix an existing translation · $25 · 2 hrs
English to Vietnamese. 1,140 words reviewed. Kept in English: the clinic name and "Medicaid," which patients already search for in English.
SUMMARY
The translation is accurate in meaning about 85% of the time. The problems are mostly tone and a few medical terms that came out of a dictionary rather than a dentist's office.
THE MAIN FIXES
| Section | Issue | Original (back-translated) | Fixed (back-translated) |
|---|---|---|---|
| Greeting | Too stiff, reads like a government letter | "The clinic informs patients of the following." | "Welcome to our clinic. Here is what to expect." |
| Pronouns | Uses a form that sounds like speaking to a child | "You (child form) must arrive early." | "Please arrive 15 minutes early." (respectful form for adults) |
| Cleaning | Wrong term: "washing teeth" | "Teeth washing appointment" | "Teeth cleaning appointment" (the term dentists use) |
| Root canal | Literal: "tooth root pipe" | The standard clinical term, with a short plain explanation | |
| Payment | Missing a sentence about payment plans | Sentence added | |
| Cancellation | "You will be punished" for late cancellation | "There is a $25 fee for cancellations with less than 24 hours' notice." |
- Section
- Greeting
- Issue
- Too stiff, reads like a government letter
- Original (back-translated)
- "The clinic informs patients of the following."
- Fixed (back-translated)
- "Welcome to our clinic. Here is what to expect."
- Section
- Pronouns
- Issue
- Uses a form that sounds like speaking to a child
- Original (back-translated)
- "You (child form) must arrive early."
- Fixed (back-translated)
- "Please arrive 15 minutes early." (respectful form for adults)
- Section
- Cleaning
- Issue
- Wrong term: "washing teeth"
- Original (back-translated)
- "Teeth washing appointment"
- Fixed (back-translated)
- "Teeth cleaning appointment" (the term dentists use)
- Section
- Root canal
- Issue
- Literal: "tooth root pipe"
- Original (back-translated)
- Fixed (back-translated)
- The standard clinical term, with a short plain explanation
- Section
- Payment
- Issue
- Missing a sentence about payment plans
- Original (back-translated)
- Fixed (back-translated)
- Sentence added
- Section
- Cancellation
- Issue
- "You will be punished" for late cancellation
- Original (back-translated)
- Fixed (back-translated)
- "There is a $25 fee for cancellations with less than 24 hours' notice."
The cancellation line was the one the patient mentioned. "Punished" is a much stronger word in Vietnamese than "fee."
CULTURAL NOTES
- Older patients often bring an adult child to translate. I added one line: "Family members are welcome to join you in the room."
- Addresses: I kept the clinic's address in English format so patients can type it into a map app.
READ ALOUD
I read the full packet aloud. Two sentences were too long to say in one breath, so I split them.
Glossary attached for next time. — Thuy
